Just a rough draft, so tell me what you think I should change or add!As the Ocean flows us by, Benacia she shall rise!
Followed by the deepest love for the land
Where the God's set their eyes, Benacia she shall rise!
In the sea of harmony.
Perfect in every way, we shall stand up and say
Benacia, my home I make of thee
Where the homeless are the kings, and the loved ones sing
Benacia, my home I make of thee
The birds and trees, the mountains and the bees sing praises! (sing praises!)
Rivers of deepest blue, forests so green for you,
Benacia, I'm in love with you
Benacia, I'm in love with you!
Perfect in ever way, we shall stand up and say
Benacia, my home I make of thee
Where the homeless are the kings, and the loved ones sing
Benacia, my home I make of thee!!!!
Benacia, my home I make of thee!!!!!
Benacian Countial Anthem
- Syr William
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Benacian Countial Anthem
- Syr William
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Re: Benacian Countial Anthem
Well what does everyone think? Any suggestions and constructive criticism is welcome.
- Gman Russell
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Re: Benacian Countial Anthem
I think it's well written, honestly. Except for this part:
Ever heard of 'the Birds and the Bees' talk? It'll have some of the more immature of your american audience giggling alittle. I know I did.
The birds and trees, the mountains and the bees sing praises! (sing praises!)
Ever heard of 'the Birds and the Bees' talk? It'll have some of the more immature of your american audience giggling alittle. I know I did.
What follows has lead me to this place where I belong, with all erased.
- Syr William
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Re: Benacian Countial Anthem
When I was writing it I noticed that, but decided to keep it for laughs.
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Re: Benacian Countial Anthem
It's very good.
- Syr William
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Re: Benacian Countial Anthem
Thanks!
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